Review: Hailey's Capture by Bryan Weston

Any time a man sits down and attempts to write lesbian sex, BDSM style or not, I have to give him credit for at least stepping outside the comfort zone.  Over the years I've come to the conclusion that I just don't really understand women - at least not from a perspective where I want to be writing something describing the emotional output of the fair sex.  So when I sat down and read through Bryan Weston's "Hailey's Capture" available from the BDSM Library, I was already just a bit biased in favor of the story.

As expected for a male written BDSM lesbian story, the focus was centered more on the action than the emotion.  After reading female written lesbian stories the best analogy I can give is that these stories are like oral sex.  A man can perform cunnilingus on a woman and she'll enjoy the experience because it is intense and rough and direct.  Or a woman can perform cunnilingus on a woman and she'll enjoy the experience because it is intense, delicate, and all encompassing.  Point being both experiences are enjoyable, but very different, and for entirely opposite reasons.

In a nut shell Hailey's Capture is about a BDSM dominatrix who enjoys luring teenage girls to her home, then sexually tormenting them.  Weston's story doesn't really have a plot beyond what the dominatrix does to her fresh victim, but it doesn't need to.  I myself write plenty of stories that I condemn with the phrase "porn without plot."  That's not the point of these kinds of tales.  Besides, the reality is that Weston has an inventive mind and while the circumstances of his story are common and found elsewhere, the devil is in the details and his are exquisite.

The best scene in the entire story is where Hailey is bound upright into the Dominatrix's fucking machine, then stuffed with an anal electrode, along with electric clamps on her nipples and a suction cup on her clit.  And as poor little Hailey endures the non-stop pounding of the six inch long synthetic cock, the dominatrix leaves.  Perfect.

The end of the story is a setup for a part two or a sequel.  It doesn't matter which actually because part one is a self-contained tale all by itself.  This is the mark of an author who understands the concept of episodic writing, an understanding that is quite rare on the BDSM Library.  Even better, the story is relatively well written, in first person, and I didn't see any major errors to distract the readers.  That's always nice.

I'm hoping Mr. Weston writes a part two or a sequel to this fun, little tale.  Why?  Because I want to see how long Hailey spends on that machine!  I give this tale 9 out of 10.

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Stephanie's marriage is in shambles and past events have left her emotionally and physically stressed. Unsure of her husband's love, Stephanie enrolls them both, without his knowledge, in a BDSM reality television game show, hoping that the shock, sex, and intensity of the competition will bring Mark back to her. But the risks she undertakes are high, perhaps too high. Check out the free sample!

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Review: You Do the Crime, You Pay the Time - A.P. Damine

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Story Codes: M/f snuff reluctant Extreme Synopsis: A slave has greatly offended her Master. As punishment, he sent an executioner to fuck her in the ass and hang her. She decides to make the best of a bad situation. 

I just finished the incredibly short story "You Do the Crime, You Pay the Time" by A.P. Damien over at the BDSM Library.  Normally I wouldn't write a review for a story like this, but since the library's rating system is still down, I find myself even more motivated to leave feedback for authors.

The first thing I want to note about the story is that it is not in a standard format.  It's more of a dialog and thought recording between the girl and her executioner.  The author, A.P. Damien actually does a decent job in separating the thoughts and dialog between the two characters, using a combination of symbols, italics, and font color.  That said, it almost feels more like a script lacking set descriptions.  Very strange.

But despite the fact that there are no narrative descriptions, the author does a good job in using his characters to set the stage.  And it's not obvious either.  There's no "Oh look!  A noose that's made of soft rope attached to a boom arm that swings, underneath a small platform."  The descriptions are sufficient to provide a basic outline and the action of the story takes the reader along without need for anything more specific.  I like authors who can allow a reader's imagination to handle so much without making it a strain.

The characters themselves are simple, yet intriguing.  No one is named, except for absent Master Damien (the author himself?) who has ordered the events of the evening.  But while neither character has a name, their attitudes define them quite well, and since the author grants us private access into their thought processes, it opens up a relationship that feels deeper than the mere dialog would have provided.  

The plot is simple.  Slave girl has messed up and is sent, unknowingly, to her execution.  Master Damien has requested death by hanging, as well as having his "former" slave girl screwed in the rear.  The executioner is a gentle man, which is a sweet irony, and he pleasures her to orgasm before finally allowing the noose to cut of her air.

The story is ridiculously short, but it is sweet, and despite the funky format, has a lot going for it.  I'm going to give it a very strong 7 out of 10, and admit this almost made an 8.  

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The Bitter End - Rue Volley

The Bitter End: Rue Volley

Bethany was born into a world of privilege and has never had to want for anything in her life. Her parents gave her everything but the one thing she desired the most...love. When Bethany’s mother dies, her Father becomes even more distant with the immediate replacement of Bethany’s mother by “Miko”, a woman who has no compassion nor interest in Bethany whatsoever.

On her own and living in a penthouse, a lavish gift from her father, Bethany ignores all responsibility as she lives on a weekly allowance her Father is sure to place into her bank account. With too much time on her hands, Bethany is free to pursue other interests such as a young man she never cared for in school named Ryan Blackwood. Ryan is a male escort for hire and has made his living on pleasuring the higher echelons of New York society women, but when he meets Bethany his game is shifted from one of hunter to one of prey and he will soon find out that she is not the easy target he once imagined.

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Customer Service - By Felicity Brandon

I’m not a fan of present tense narratives under most circumstances.  The awkwardness of the prose always seems to distract, and yet there are authors who use it with skill and grace.  Suzanne Collins who wrote Hunger Games did it well, using the present tense narrative form to keep the readers in the dark about how the plot ends.  In the erotic world, author Felicity Brandon does it with style, though more from a personal preference than out of the necessity of plot.  Even more incredibly, Felicity Brandon writes from a first person perspective, forcing action, dialog, and even description through the lens of a narrator, and not just an author’s pen.  And she does it well.

Her latest short story, “Customer Service” is pure gold, balancing action, dialog, and description in a sexually tense and fascinating way.  In it, Felicity Brandon introduces us to Polly, a beleaguered waitress dealing with the dreaded customer “Rachel” who wraps her arrogance and bad attitude around herself like a cloak.  Polly discovers a note with Rachel’s phone number on it and a personal message.  Intrigued, Polly calls and finds herself willingly submitting to the dominatrix, whose attitude doesn’t change, even in the privacy of her own home.  The sex is steamy, the descriptions poignant, and the tension builds.

The only critical complaint I can give – is that I wished the story kept going.  Rachel is an amazing character with vibrant colors and an unforgiving attitude that makes me like her, despite her aggressive and haughty behavior.  I almost wish she had offered Polly a job as house maid.  It would have been totally appropriate and I would have loved to read Polly’s reaction to the humiliating uniform and demanding antics of Rachel. 

“Customer Service” is a short, fast read, filled with eroticism and romance that anyone, man or woman, would enjoy.  I heartily recommend this tale and give it a full ten out of ten rating. It's currently priced at 99 cents and I think, despite being a ten minute read, might actually be worth it.

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Review: Disciplinary Action Anthology

This memorial day weekend I perused Disciplinary Action, a brief anthology of short stories by several different authors linked with Xcite Books, a publisher of erotica.  There were five stories included in the anthology.  Overall the collection isn't bad, however it certainly wasn't worth the $2.99 cost.  Anthologies generally need to be used by publishers as a sort of means to introduce their pantheon of authors.  My primary issue with the price was that overall the collection was only 51 pages long.  I sell full length novels for $2.99 and in the cutthroat industry of e-book erotica, $2.99 for a 51 page anthology is a death sentence.  I'd have serious reservations about buying another Xcite book again unless I knew the author and loved their work.

The first story in the anthology is Disciplinary Action by Felicity Brandon and sets the tone for the rest of the anthology.  The plot, which is a timeless classic, involves a rather unbelievable young woman in similarly unbelievable circumstances, being blackmailed into sexual submissive by her employer.  Ms. Brandon's strength lies in the emotional content of the main character but the action is unfortunately predictable.  The antagonist (or depending on your viewpoint, the PROtagonist) Mr. Carlton explains that he has video tape of the main character: Megan, copulating with a fellow co-worker during the Christmas Party, on premises, and then proceeds to fondle her while she's watching.  With only the video hanging over her, Megan suddenly finds that not only is she submissive, but likes it, and allows Carlton to punish her with a spanking and screw her brains out.  The action is precisely what you would expect  and while readers will enjoy the description of Megan's emotional turmoil, they'll be racking their brains trying to explain away her actions, which make no logical sense.  Why is Megan willing to submit to this man with so little to sway her?  Were she being accused of theft, I could possibly understand it.  But a single video of her having fun with a co-worker, off the clock?  And before she can even come to an agreement with her employer, the man begins fondling her?  Can any one say sexual harassment?  

"Disciplinary Action" is followed up by Beverly Langland's "Sandra's Stockings" a short hash of a mess constructed with simple sentences and short prose that makes it choppy and difficult to read.  Admittedly, I'm not a foot fetishist and find the idea of sucking some woman's used stockings to be unattractive.  But that is the risk of an anthology.  The plot revolves around Lucy, a submissive who serves an older woman and happens to be entranced with her stockings, and tells of the day that her life changed as she began to "serve" Mistress Sandra.  The narrative bounces between present and past tense abruptly and the entire story is more of a journal than a story with an active plot.

The gem of the anthology is the teaser story "Who is the Keymaster and Who The Key" by Ralph Greco, Jr.  In this short tale, classic playboy Ken, who certainly has a thing for his best friend's wife Lisa, gets her to put a chastity cage on his manhood, limiting his usual antics to seething frustration.  The sexual tension in this tale is masterfully done and despite the fact that I would never, ever, place myself in Ken's position, I found myself aroused from the idea of it alone.  The prose is excellent and the narrative compelling.

We are then subjected to "Daddy’s House" by Angel Propps, a strange conglomeration that adds a healthy dose of confusion to a mix of lesbian sex and punishment.  The author does a great job describing the characters and uses adjectives almost to a fault, peppering her sentences with them almost as an afterthought.  We are introduced to a powerful dominatrix of a woman in the very first paragraph, only to stare in bewilderment as we learn that she makes her submissive house slaves call her "Daddy".  Why? No idea.  It makes no sense.  It's as if she is so dominant, so testosterone laden, she actually wants to be a man.  I always thought that being a dominant woman was about being in control, yet ALSO being a woman.  Angel Propps does nothing to explain this disparity.  Then things get weirder when either the worst repetitive typo in history rears it's ugly head or for another unexplained reason, the submissive women living with "Daddy" are called "grrls."  Yes, you might have noticed there are no vowels in the world "grrls," which made no sense to me and was instantly classified in the same category as the lesbian dominatrix being called "Daddy".  After carefully filing those two oddities in my WTF drawer, I moved on through another formulaic plot that was saved from borishness by the author's capable action scenes.  The punishment she inflicts upon the "grlls" is creative and interesting, but the sexual tension really doesn't move in any direction.

Lastly we are given "The Art Master" by J. Smith, another story with a plot concept so old and unlikely that it almost scares me.  I'm not sure if J. Smith is a woman or man, but rest assured regardless of the author's gender, there are not many men out there who are "professional dominants" and sell their services to highly attractive woman who secretly wish to be abused and ravished by their ideal man.  I'm guessing that the "art master" must formally be either an Old Spice spokesman or an Axe commercial guy.  With this questionable story base used for the foundation, we are then treated to a repeat of every other spanking sex story every written.  Rest assured, I believe that old and well-used plots can be revitalized  by a talented author, but it takes creativity to do it.  "The Art Master" brings nothing new to the table.

All in all I can't recommend purchasing this book.  To put it in baseball terminology, three strikes, one double, and one home run doesn't make the game.  Two of the authors, Felicity Brandon and Ralph Greco, Jr. are probably worth reading on their own, but that will have to be a review for another day.

In summary, I give Disciplinary Action a 6 out of 10 rating.  

Review: Kelly Gets Her Dues

Story Codes: F+/f Tit Torture BDSM bondage Rape job humiliation nc Heavy Synopsis: Kelly, a beautiful girl who can't seem to make female friends, is kinapped and put through a car wash testing facility by her jealous coworkers. 

This morning I spent five minutes reading "Kelly Gets Her Dues" by Billdo at the BDSM Library.  In the story, a curvaceous yet socially challenged girl gets abused by her co-workers on a car weathering tester.  To be honest, there are some serious plot holes in this story, despite the relative creativity of the scenes.

First of all, Kelly is described as a pretty girl with 34C breasts, perfect waist, and striking features.  Yet she seems to alienate the other female students in some way that the author never elaborates on.  Evidently despite her good looks and obvious attention from the men, she never seems to develop any specific attachments.  After getting poor grades, she decides to work instead of going to college.

At work, Kelly again mysteriously offends her female co-workers. How?  No clue.  She just does.  Is it her perfect breasts?  Is it her striking features?  Or is it merely the author's whim, needing a reason for Kelly to be strapped down on an automated testing platform and subjected to a bevy of mechanical torments?

Neither is it explained how the four (or more?) female co-workers manage to drug Kelly, strip her naked, and move her to the testing area without trouble.  Were there no other workers at the department?  Is the secretary pool just allowed to go in and start the testing procedure whenever they want?  Weird.

In the end, Kelly is bound spread-eagled to the testing platform.  Her torment starts with a scene reminiscent of Dr. Wu's Tripping With Tiffany, a fantastic story where Tiffany, on a visit to meet with her new sorority, is tied naked to the top of a car and run through the car wash.  For Kelly however, various nozzles of hot water, cold water, and soapy water are turned upon her, she ends up being "whipped" by the wet strands used to clean car bodies.  The torment from there gets both ludicrous and interesting, with some of the most deviant and unbelievable mechanical rape ever written.

The writing itself is half-decent and frankly the story suffers mostly from the disjointed explanations.  There is a total lack of empathy with Kelly, since the author doesn't provide her perspective or a description of her senses beyond a few well placed cries.  The description is decent if understated, but there is absolutely no dialog whatsoever.  There are a few spots were questionable wording, like " Recently, her female coworkers were getting more cruel."  It's not "more cruel." It's "crueler."  And adding the word "recently" makes the tense questionable in the first place.  It's not wrong per se, but it feels awkward.

The story is also short.  Very short.  As I mentioned, I had it read in less that five minutes.  That was just long enough to get aroused, and certainly not long enough or detailed enough to do anything about it.  

In summary, this tale was frustrating from a variety of angles, but the author demonstrates a creativity that is worth exploring.  With an expanded perspective, this story would easily rate much higher than a 6 out of 10 stars.

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