This morning I spent five minutes reading "Kelly Gets Her Dues" by Billdo at the BDSM Library. In the story, a curvaceous yet socially challenged girl gets abused by her co-workers on a car weathering tester. To be honest, there are some serious plot holes in this story, despite the relative creativity of the scenes.
First of all, Kelly is described as a pretty girl with 34C breasts, perfect waist, and striking features. Yet she seems to alienate the other female students in some way that the author never elaborates on. Evidently despite her good looks and obvious attention from the men, she never seems to develop any specific attachments. After getting poor grades, she decides to work instead of going to college.
At work, Kelly again mysteriously offends her female co-workers. How? No clue. She just does. Is it her perfect breasts? Is it her striking features? Or is it merely the author's whim, needing a reason for Kelly to be strapped down on an automated testing platform and subjected to a bevy of mechanical torments?
Neither is it explained how the four (or more?) female co-workers manage to drug Kelly, strip her naked, and move her to the testing area without trouble. Were there no other workers at the department? Is the secretary pool just allowed to go in and start the testing procedure whenever they want? Weird.
In the end, Kelly is bound spread-eagled to the testing platform. Her torment starts with a scene reminiscent of Dr. Wu's Tripping With Tiffany, a fantastic story where Tiffany, on a visit to meet with her new sorority, is tied naked to the top of a car and run through the car wash. For Kelly however, various nozzles of hot water, cold water, and soapy water are turned upon her, she ends up being "whipped" by the wet strands used to clean car bodies. The torment from there gets both ludicrous and interesting, with some of the most deviant and unbelievable mechanical rape ever written.
The writing itself is half-decent and frankly the story suffers mostly from the disjointed explanations. There is a total lack of empathy with Kelly, since the author doesn't provide her perspective or a description of her senses beyond a few well placed cries. The description is decent if understated, but there is absolutely no dialog whatsoever. There are a few spots were questionable wording, like " Recently, her female coworkers were getting more cruel." It's not "more cruel." It's "crueler." And adding the word "recently" makes the tense questionable in the first place. It's not wrong per se, but it feels awkward.
The story is also short. Very short. As I mentioned, I had it read in less that five minutes. That was just long enough to get aroused, and certainly not long enough or detailed enough to do anything about it.
In summary, this tale was frustrating from a variety of angles, but the author demonstrates a creativity that is worth exploring. With an expanded perspective, this story would easily rate much higher than a 6 out of 10 stars.
Read "Kelly Gets Her Dues"
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