Review: Katie In Trouble by James Hunt

Story Codes: M/f M+/f spanking slavery job humiliation nc Synopsis: The new laws that allowed certain men to accuse unmarried women on their staff of 'disobedience' and 'disrespect' had not been tested more than once since they were introduced quietly over 2 years ago. Katie was about to be the second unlucky accused.

This morning I read "Katie In Trouble"  by James Hunt at the BDSM Library and I came away with mixed feelings.  The first thing that any reader is going to notice is the atrocious grammar and punctuation in the story. It's barely readable. There are missing commas, strangely compounded sentences, improperly constructed prepositional phrases, and in general, a deplorable lack of skill at the ACT of writing.

But if you are able to dig through all that, there is a little kernel of decent story buried within the detritus of grammar and questionable plot.  So let's begin.

The plot concept of "Katie In Trouble" is simplistic and old.  New laws have been established that create subjective requirements for unmarried women to be "respectful and obedient" of the men around them.  The author creates this world, expecting us to take it on faith that such laws came about legitimately.  That's fine. With this particular plot concept, this is a common tactic.  It provides a basis for WHY the protagonist (Katie) is being treated this way.

But rather than a story of abuse and slavery, it is the story of an interview between Katie's attorney, the judge charged with her case, and her actual accuser.  And rather than discussing the charges, there seems to be a collusion between the defense attorney, the judge, and Katie's boss (who is also her accuser), and with Katie directed to stand there with her hands on head, dressed in her lingerie, the accuser is asked how he plans to discipline Katie if she is found guilty.

Here is where the tired worn out plot bursts with creativity and while the described abuses to Katie are light and quite predictable, there is a tension placed into the tale that makes them seem fresh.  It is explained that she will be caned twice daily, plus be made to serve sexually.  The judge even seems to want her publicly punished as well, and Katie stands there, crying, forced to listen to these men sit around discussing her upcoming slavery and abused.  It's rather enjoyable.  

The story then ends with a strange add on scene where Katie preps for the upcoming trial, and doesn't seem to connect well, which makes me suspect that Mr. Hunt plans on making this story a serial. If so, then I'm disappointed since I don't like serials and Mr. Hunt ended "part one" at a uniquely awkward spot.

In summary, there is a tiny glimmer of gold in a huge chunk of granite so big that it might not be worth it for the common reader to even mine for it.  I give Mr. Hunt a positive 5 out of 10 stars and suggests that if nothing else, he edit for spelling and grammar errors before posting to the Library.  

You can read "Katie In Trouble" here.